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Wedding Bliss DX pg.4 by Hipper-Reed Wedding Bliss DX pg.4 by Hipper-Reed
Here's the next page. It took me longer than expected (Thank you ever so much, GIMP, for randomly deciding to crash no less than six times and wasting about a cumulative hour of my time) but I'm happy with the result. Was thinking about making the text semi-transparent like I did in the original, but decided that was stupid since there are a gajillion other ways of visually showing what Elliot/Eliza is thinking.

Also, unlike the original version of this, I didn't rip old photos from the net. Yay, originality :thumbsup:

Hope you enjoy :)

NOTE So many have stated that they preferred the "You" in the hypnosis statements from the original, instead of the "I". But I did this for a reason. I wanted it to be more insidious. It's one thing to have a mustachioed man wave a pocket watch and say, "You are getting sleepy," and quite another to make the victim convince themselves they've just taken three helpings of nyquil and that listening to what they're told is probably the single, most amazing thing they could do.

In other words, by having her/him say "I" instead of Gonad saying "You" it makes the action less passive, more inclusive, and shows that Elliot (at least a part of him) is convincing HIMSELF, through Gonad, those things he/she mentions.

I don't know. It just seemed more interactive that way.





To find the original pages this comic is based off of, go here: [link]

Feel free to commission me. Details, contact infor and prices are on my Deviant Art Journal here: [link]
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:iconmetroid-life:
Metroid-Life Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2013
I just love how frolic is a sound effect, hehe.
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the-sand-prince Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013
wierd
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2011
I still miss the 'Is she ever going to throw the dead flowers' line since it adds a sense of imperfection to the flash memories, since no one's life is perfect.
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CrazyCowProductions Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2010
certainly enjoying the re-mix here :)
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:iconhipper-reed:
Hipper-Reed Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2010
I'm glad :love:
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:iconcrazycowproductions:
CrazyCowProductions Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2010
no problem at all :)
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:iconmr-cryuga:
Mr-Cryuga Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
do comic artists have a secret competition going for most ridiculous effect sounds, because *FROLIC* might net a medal, granted there are far far worse (or better?) ones but still this is pretty high up there X D
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:iconhipper-reed:
Hipper-Reed Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2010
I don't think there is, but I'm glad you seem to like mine anyway :XD:
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:iconmr-cryuga:
Mr-Cryuga Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
lol, no problem ^^
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:iconhungrypaperweight:
HungryPaperweight Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2010
I didn't know our hero/heroine had a name. :stupidme:
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:iconhipper-reed:
Hipper-Reed Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2010
Yep. :nod:
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Uncle-Ben Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2010
Wowsers! You have some amazing things going on here. He face as a flower girl looks great. Her hair is fitting. I agree the "I" over "You" is a little scarier.

Good job with this page.
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MWkillkenny84 Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2010
Rewriting of the mind: on going.
Willl the victim resist to the reset of his personality or not?
Kukukukukukuku!
Vote: 10
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Hipper-Reed Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2010
:XD:
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allstar64 Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2010
Have to agree that "you" vs "I" gave a better scene of the mind control in the original in the though speech.

Comparing the baby scene to the last one the two are actually quite identical. The pose and clothes even the coloring is pretty much the same.

She appears cuter in your original for 2 reasons.

1. You drew her smaller in the original with respect to the picture overall which makes her seem smaller and more helpless like a baby.
2. Her head and eyes were proportionally much bigger in the original which made her seem cuter.

As for the final panel the pony tail was a nice touch since it is the most unique hairstyle she has in the entire comic. I mean that it was the most different hairstyle from what she currently has that is shown.

Now that I've been such a jerk time for me to get some points back. Great job with the outfits. They look much better. Also the backgrounds look great.
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Hipper-Reed Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2010
As far as the mind control thing goes, I wanted to show it as more of a brainwashing instead of a "Yes, master, I obey," kind of thing.

I mean, I guess the result is still the same, but that's what I intended all along.

As for the girl looking cute as a baby. I honestly thought/think the opposite. I thought that by bringing her closer and making her more proportional she'd come off as cuter. But maybe that's a personal preference. ^^;

I didn't like the pony tail. I'm sure I could have drawn it better in this version but I was kind of psyched about doing her hair up in curls. Pony tails are great and all but how often have I drawn ringlets? Not often enough I feel :giggle:

I'm glad you like the outfits :D They were quite fun to draw. The backgrounds were fun on a technical standpoint but straight lines tend to start annoying me, even though they're nescissary. The penultimate panel has my favorite background because there are no straight lines :XD:

Glad you seem to like it :thumbsup:
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2010
I'll admit him being naked in that short bit in his own mind was good.

Though part of me think the 'you' instead of the 'I' better shows Xellos-Expy's mind control.

And truth be told I actually miss the 'Is she ever going to throw the dead flowers?' Joke since it added some depth to the false memories and making them easier to assimilate.

And I think her child self looked better in a pony tale than tied up. Just personal taste I guess.

It might have been more interesting if his hair had been read or unseen in that moment he opened his eyes to better hammer in enter the stream of false memories.

I know this all sounds like nit picking, but I'm a detail oriented person.

That being said, the first panel's 'dive' is better than just floating in the void and create a better sense of movement and -action- which comics are about of course ultimately since it's a visual medium.

And artistically, the shadowing, perspective, proportions of the characters is much much better.

And honestly the 'naked guy' in the first panel IMHO shows artistic courage.

And the images themselves all feel more alive and more in motion than the original.

Unlike the loss of the rainbow gradient hypno-eyes of Xellos-Expy, the DRAWN backgrounds honestly ADD to the comic's life.

It's great to see this revamp continued. It's fun.


For the record, the guy's true awareness waking up just before the vows really added impact to things.

And I know you said before that Daisy's 'mother' suddenly TFing into being was just a throw away idea, BUT IT WORKED! Seriously, it did.

Again, you've seriously improved as an artist while maintaining your own style!
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Hipper-Reed Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2010
Thanks. I love listening to your comments :)
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2010
Just hope what I said was useful.

And when you stop and think about it, the bundle of flowers aside, Daisy got off the easiest since she got to live a normal life afterwards.

Sorry I keep bringing her up, but I just find it interesting and cool how after the wedding she was totally forgot about by EVERYONE (even the brain zapped guests). But was saved by a basic rule of magic and reality: no being can exist, and have no existence.

I'll be also cool to see if the ORIGINAL flower girl who was intended for the wedding ends up a cherub statue for the church (you know what I mean), or what other 'refuge in audacity' you make work so well you use.

I can actually see Daisy after the happy couple take off into the sky that everyone ignores her (still brain zapped for the time being) despite her desperate pleas of her logical question of where her mother is.

Daisy sums up the 'what about afterwards?' elements in 'zap and go' transformation sequences. And how such reckless use of such a power would REALLY effect things. (And yet Daisy's save by reality needing to accept the fact she -does- exist and must therefore have existed. And thus the transform of the wresting fan into her mother. OH! And how her mother still love wresting but now for the guys in skin tight outfits is a mark of true brilliance and humor that I've seen used before and works here exactly wonderfully!!!)

Did any of the gold digger's family show up for the wedding?
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Giantess-Mom-Amanda Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2010
Adoreable baby scene.
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Hipper-Reed Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2010
Thankyou :love:
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ShaD-23 Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Hm, I dunno. Things for the most part are better this time around except for the fourth panel. I think he/she was a cuter baby in the original, but all the rest is perfect.
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Hipper-Reed Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2010
Thanks :D
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Animefan-279 Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
When is someone just going to tell Gonad "I'm gonna stomp on your ass so far down in some mudhole I won't stop til I'm wearing socks made of dry shit." :laughing:
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Hipper-Reed Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2010
I doubt that's likely to happen ^^;
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Animefan-279 Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Why not? Why can't there be one badass mutha that's willing to kill him if he tries to screw him over?
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Hipper-Reed Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2010
It's not that there can't be, it's just it wouldn't fit the story.
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:iconanimefan-279:
Animefan-279 Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Any story?
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:iconhipper-reed:
Hipper-Reed Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2010
This story.
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